I wield my words viciously
Like a knife
I slash at her
As I rape her
Hold her down and penetrate her
Blood showers from my blade
As I overwhelm her
But slowly my ravishes
Thrust after thrust
Turn into love
And I wonder
What have I done?
A little explanation on this one. It was written about a year and a half ago after a particularly vicious fight with my my wife. As most married people know, it is easier sometimes to hurt the one you love the most and know the best.
You know how it is; you know all of their triggers and weak spots. I am not normally a cruel person nor is my wife ,but in this instance, I started throwing low blows while we were going at it. Immediately , I regretted it because I could see that I had deeply hurt her and she is the last person that I want to do that to.
So, there it is. Yeah, I was really an asshole that night.
Reblogged this on HarsH ReaLiTy and commented:
Yes the explanation really does help heh. I imagine without it you would get some questionable comments and possible some accusations from certain people. 🙂 -OM
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Dude, you didn’t… Now you have me laughing my ass off. Thanks, my buzz has been really “Harshed” this mornng
🙂 I hope you get some views on it heh. You definitely have the hook.
That is hilarious. I have been “O.M’d” That’s what I get for laughing so hard when you do it to other people.
I see myself as the genie that floats on karma.
LOL. That’s a good one unto itself. For some reason, you always have the ability to cheer me up. I think it’s your evil…… Just kidding
I get it, words can be even more hurtful than actions, others may not, I feel for you if the harpies latch on to this one.
Yes, it happened when I posted it on a poetry site. I personally thought that it was plain and clear that it was vicious word use. They didn’t like the violent analogy, but hey, that is how it feels.
Many people are hypersensitive to the use of the word rape in any context. On the flip side it is a very powerful way to express an idea.
You know , I did actually have a slight concern about offending someone who had actually been violently raped. I still used the analogy because writers words, like boxers fists, can be deadly weapons.
I don’t find it offensive, I found it true. From my perspective a violent rape was less emotionally damaging than a vicious verbal assault from someone I loved and trusted deeply. The one was an act of violence on my person the other an act of violence on my being. Not all women see it that way.
Awww moderation, yes, that should provide a shield of sorts
I don’t moderate
It said my comment went to moderation?
That is some automatic wordpress spam filter that I don’t know how to control. In my control panel I have moderation off. For some reason it catches the occasionally commenter, even people that I follow and converse with
Some people keep the setting for it turned on. I like to live dangerously so I keep mine off, all the time.
“they didn’t like the violent analogy”…what the hell is writing for if not to ‘reach’ people; draw out an emotion? Dang.
Oh yeah, great job.
thanks, Karyn
It is definitely easier to hurt the ones we love because we know exactly where to wound them.
Yes, and they are last ones you want to do it too.
Exactly. Strange phenomenon.
This is deep….
Thanks, I’m glad you liked it.
It is so easy to hurt someone you love in the spur of the moment, and you can’t take back words or actions… I’m pretty sure we’ve all been there…
This piece evokes a powerful response, for it is brutally honest. I loved it.
Thank yo, I’m glad you liked it. I think some of that brutal honesty may have been motivated by a sense guilt. It was not one of my finest moments and the woman in question is one whom I deeply love and respect.
The strong sense of guilt is what makes the poem so thought-provoking. I guess it is indicative of the depth of the underlying emotion- love.
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